2013年11月9日 星期六

Th latest post for my project

Topic : How to Improve relationship with parents

Main Idea:

Suffering from mis-communication and misunderstanding with my mom, I decided to study about raltionships of those families which are having similiar troubles as I do. Finally, I research and found a lot of information to connect with my project.

Topic sentences for 1st paragraph : What made mw want to do this topic?

Topic sentences for snd pargraph: Why do we fight over our parents?

Topic sentences for 3rd paragraph: How to solve the problems?



I'll think about my topic sentences again because i think it's kind of... strange.

1 則留言:

  1. Yes. Take topic sentence 1 for example. I would write it this way:

    I am interested in studying child-parent relationship because I have communication problems with my mom.
    sub-point 1: We have miscommunication issues because she is very demanding.
    sub-point 2: ...
    sub-point 3: ...

    Topic sentence 2:
    (Instead of saying why, state the reasons in the topic sentence directly.)

    I think topic sentence 1 and 2 can be combined together. I'd change the topic of the second paragraph to: The problem between me and my mom prompts me to do research on other people's relationship with their mothers, and I learn that ...

    Topic sentence 3: State the solutions to the problem in the topic sentence.

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